Style and Revision

Chilled Eggs- This article enjoys the use of pronouns in order to draw its readers into its topic. This article makes a presumption out of technology, highlighting its absence as strange and unusual. I do feel that this article could have came to a stronger conclusion about whether or not refrigeration is worth it. Also, dropping the color preference at the end was interesting and all,but it was kind of off topic it felt out of place.

Tree Spoons- This article was a pleasure to read, the author kept a perfect distance from the audience. It felt as if they were involved and invested in their writing without throwing around pronouns like the last article. They lead inquiry with pathos and logos building connections to the reader through practical experience and global cultural applications. The author starts with something as boring and as interesting as a simple wooden spoon and by the end  of the chapter is making strong claims about human nature and displaying revolutionary viewpoints about food and work ethic. To be honest this reading was actually a little inspirational.

Pre- review Intro- The written word is a remarkable thing, allowing for the recording of emotion and thought through the means of a device. Early writing reflected this with romanticized, long, flowing, emotional sentences. The invention of the cell phone has changed this, placing heavy value on concise, short messages using acronyms and leaving out adjectives or using shorter generalizations. An exemplary traditional farewell would be “I pray to find thee in good health” whereas in modern times a “seeya” or “ttyl” marks the end of a conversation. This conversational evolution has taken the value of an emotional and personalized interpersonal communication and changed it to nothing more than exchanging data.  This large shift from the spoken word to the written word is a double edged sword with sacrifices as well as benefits.

Post Review Intro- The written word is a remarkable thing, allowing for the recording of emotion and thought through the means of a device. Early writing reflected this with romanticized, long, flowing, emotional sentences. Those in the early days of easily accessible writing  would write in more detail than verbal communication in order to compensate for their lack of physical presence. The invention of the cell phone has changed this, placing heavy value on concise, short messages using acronyms and leaving out adjectives or using shorter generalizations. An exemplary traditional farewell would be “I pray to find thee in good health” whereas in modern times a “seeya” or “ttyl” marks the end of a conversation. This conversational evolution has taken the value of an emotional and personalized interpersonal communication placing value on expression and changed it to simply exchanging data, a reflection of our efficiency based society.  This large shift from the spoken word to the written word, especially in the context of cell phones is a double edged broadsword with a heinous cost and a value so great their loss would be debilitating to many.

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