Tone Analysis and Introduction

The article on egg storage is meant to be educational to a broad base, and uses a friendly tone with easier words to do that. Talking about eggs in “little safety vests” and poop adds interest to the article and makes the topic bearable or even fascinating to learn about, regardless of a person’s background. The introduction on kitchen technology pushes to be relatable by bringing up a love of butter and coffee, the author describing their very traditional breakfast, and referencing television shows like Futurama. There are also illustrations and descriptions of amusing historical kitchen technologies like filtering coffee through a fish bladder or the idea of 50 years of cans with no easy way to open them. These texts could be boring lists of pros and cons of technologies and dates and periods of history when the technologies changed but instead they were engaging and told stories of evolving kitchens and supermarket aisles.

My original introduction:

In December of 1947, there was a “World’s Fair of vending machines” in Chicago with over 5,000 attendees. The Billboard magazine used to set aside their final 15-25 pages to focus exclusively on the vending machine industry for all their issues released from the start of the 1930s up until 1970. The National Automatic Merchandising Association (NAMA) continues to hold big conventions annually for companies in the business, from the well-known soda corporations to unheard of companies manufacturing and managing the machines all around us. Today the vending machine business is approximately a thirty billion dollar industry. Most people don’t give these large quiet boxes very much thought but the development of vending machines has created a unique culture without anyone noticing. This is a culture that encourages theft, gambling, and unhealthy eating habits. It has also promoted alcoholism, addiction to nicotine, and even the sexualization of minors. Vending machines kill, directly and indirectly. The vending machine certainly has its various benefits but the counterculture it has shaped has arguably caused much harm that ought to be taken into account more often as well.

Revised introduction:

In December of 1947, there was a “World’s Fair of vending machines” in Chicago with over 5,000 attendees. The Billboard magazine used to set aside their final 15-25 pages to focus exclusively on the vending machine industry from the start of the 1930s up until 1970. The National Automatic Merchandising Association (NAMA) continues to hold big conventions annually for companies in the business, from Coca-Cola and Frito-Lay to unheard of companies manufacturing and managing the machines all around us. Many people don’t realize that vending machines were quite the rage in the mid-20th century, when they functioned as restaurants, cafeterias, mini marts, and anything else the eager entrepreneurs could come up with. Today the vending machine business continue to flourish, being valued as an approximately thirty billion dollar industry. Most people don’t give these large quiet boxes very much thought but the development of vending machines has created a unique culture without anyone noticing. This is a darker culture that encourages theft, gambling, and unhealthy eating habits. It has also promoted alcoholism, addiction to nicotine, and even the sexualization of minors. The inanimate vending machines have even gone as far as killing, directly and indirectly. The vending machine certainly has its various benefits but the counterculture it has shaped has arguably caused much harm that ought to be taken into account more often as well.

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