Wednesday Class Assignment

Both of the authors in the articles used a playful tone that really allowed for you to feel their voice and not make it boring to read. This was mainly done through the spoon paper using words and phrases such as “funny noises”, “bizarre” and others while the egg article uses words like “Oddballs” to bring in their own voice. However the authors establish themselves as credible by pulling in sources and historically important facts. The other thing that I liked about the papers was how they gave the history behind each of their subjects. It seemed very loose and flowed together with what they were trying to say very well. It wasn’t like a rigid structure which is mostly done through anecdotes. This once again is another trick to bring in voice that I would like to add to my paper to make it more interesting and flow better. The two papers do a great job of bringing together all the different aspects of a technology into a cohesive and interesting essay to read through their strong sense of voice.

Without Editing

“Music speaks to every man, woman and child-high or low, rich or poor, happy or despairing- who is sensitive to its deep and powerful message” (Stokowski). Leopold Stokowski, writer of Music for All of Us, a work about the nature of music and its importance and influence in the world. ­­­The ability for people to listen and experience music is one that is so crucial to people all over the globe and culture in our society. One of the predominant ways to listen to music throughout the 20th century was the record player. The record player is also still used today by many however isn’t as widespread as it was. Record players went through a shift in their popularity changing their significance from essential to music listeners, to obsolete in terms of efficiency. This obsolescence made the record player more of a novelty that while still affects culture in a different way than it had before this shift.

With Editing

I listen to music pretty much everywhere: in the shower, on the way to class, in between classes, after class, doing homework, and in my free time. While this is quite a bit of music it isn’t uncommon to most people today. This is due to the fact that “Music speaks to every man, woman and child-high or low, rich or poor, happy or despairing- who is sensitive to its deep and powerful message” (Stokowski). Leopold Stokowski, writer of Music for All of Us, wrote a work about the nature of music and its importance and influence in the world. ­­­I mean where would we be without some of the more popular musicians Hank Williams, Frank Sinatra, Elvis Presley, the Beatles. The ability for people to listen and experience music is one that is so crucial to people all over the globe. One of the predominant ways to listen to music throughout the 20th century was the record player. The record player is also still used today by many however doesn’t have the widespread usage it once had. Record players went through a shift in their popularity changing their significance from essential to music listeners, to obsolete in terms of efficiency. This obsolescence made the record player more of a novelty that while still affects culture in a different way than it had before this shift.

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