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Original: One of the biggest problems with this graveyard is the fact satellites are made of mostly aluminum.

Edited: The aluminum in satellites is a huge problem for the satellite graveyard.

Original: If a satellite is considered a “high-orbit” satellite it must be disposed of very differently.

Edited: A “high-orbit” satellite would have to be disposed of much differently than a “low-orbit” satellite.

Original: When aluminum reacts with water it can dissolve creating aluminum ions that can be very harmful to marine life around it.

Edited: The marine life around a satellite may be damaged by the aluminum dissolving off of the satellite.

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