Revised Sentences:

These are some of the sentences I revised in my paper, original and revised versions one on top of the other.

Original:  A common misconception about AI is that Artificial Intelligence is the science of creating a robot or operating system that is capable of having the intelligent capacity equivalent to that of a human being (having thoughts, able to make decisions, able to function on its own without human intervention), like the robots we see in movies like Terminator.

Revised:  A common misconception about Artificial Intelligence revolves around the idea which portrays AI as the science of creating a robot or operating system capable of the intelligent capacity equivalent to that of a human.  In other words, in order for a machine to be truly classified as a robot under pop culture’s ideology, the machine must be equipped with the ability to have its own thoughts, make its own decisions, and function on its own without human intervention, similar to the robots we see in movies such as Terminator.

Original:  Many techniques that are used for present-day economic processes such as economic forecasting, economic policy formulation, and efficient solutions to resource allocation problems would not have ever existed without the computer, due to the fact that the computer is capable of processing and solving hundreds of equations and problems at a time (Chow).

Revised:  Many techniques used for present-day economic processes such as economic forecasting and efficient solutions for problems involving the allocating of resources would not have ever been possible without the computer’s existence (Chow). The computer’s capability of processing hundreds of complex algorithms at a time allows it to be efficient solving these types of problems, whereas the human mind’s ceiling limits man’s efficiency.

Original:  The reason tracking inventory is so important is so that there is a more efficient method of tracking the products that are being demanded, and when they need to be restocked (Lindblad).

Revised: Tracking inventory through the use of a database is so important because it provides an efficient method for knowning the products under demand along with when these products need to be restocked (Lindblad).

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