Sentence Structure Revisions

Many patients find that they become mentally stronger after dealing with amputation and the adaption to a prosthetic limb.

Many patients find they become mentally stronger after undergoing amputation and receiving a prosthetic limb.

It stands true that this inaccessibility to necessary prosthesis inhibits a patient’s mental rehabilitation process.

The truth stands, inaccessibility to necessary prosthesis inhibits a patient’s mental recovery.

For example, a man uncomfortable with his body might wear clothes that cover up his personal imperfections, a woman who is afraid to be judged for having bad eyesight might invest in contacts.

For example, a man uncomfortable with his body might wear clothes to cover up what he sees as imperfect, a woman afraid to be judged for having bad eyesight might invest in contacts.

Although it may be unbeknownst to them, this is a form of psychological rehabilitation.

Although possibly unbeknownst to the patients, they are undergoing a form of psychological recovery.

For example, an iron hand was designed and built with hinges to allow a knight, Gotz von Berlichingen, to return to battle after losing his arm (Park).

Park highlights the advancement of prosthesis technology as replacement began to be designed to return people with lost abilities For example, an iron hand was designed and built with hinges to allow a knight, Gotz von Berlichingen, to return to battle after losing his arm (Park).

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