Sentence Revisions

Original: As a new era of technology is rising up, old methods are being pushed aside and forgotten.

Revised: As a new era of technology rises up, old methods are being pushed aside and forgotten.

 

Original: As it is hard to keep up with the technology, values that come along with the traditional methods are being ignored and sometimes even forgotten.

Revised: However, it is difficult for many to see the effect as different cultures see technology and the progress of ideas in different lights.

 

Original: Very similar to this was movable type…

Revised: Very similar to this technique was movable type…

 

Original: An eBook is a book that can only be electronically downloaded and viewed.

Revised: An eBook is a book which can only be electronically downloaded or viewed

 

Original: As said in The Caxton Printer in Idaho, “There was never a time when publishers did not hope to make money on the book that they printed” (6, Fisher).

Revised: In The Caxton Printer in Idaho, it is brought to attention that “There was never a time when publishers did not hope to make money on the book that they printed” (6, Fisher).

 

Original: This incident brought up the issue of whether or not these modern reading devices really are the best thing for the future or not.

Revised: The incident uncovered the argument of whether reading devices are a reliable source for the future.

 

Original: One method of printed press that held some of the most character and culture behind its ways was the typewriter

Revised: Unlike modern eBooks, typewriters held culture and character which helped establish its place in society.

 

*These are the only sentences that I was able to change that included the words/word endings that we talked about in class. *

 

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