Sentence Revisions

-tion, -ism, -ity, -ize

Original:

Rebecca Rosen makes the assertion that it is not a stretch to think that the popularity of television may have been boosted by the ability to stay indoors in a nice, cool house during the summer in her article Keeping Cool.

Revision:

In her article Keeping Cool, Rebecca Rosen makes the assertion that it is not a stretch to think the popularity of the television came about due to  cool houses during the summer now being possible.

is, it, that, this

Original

Physician John Gorrie’s approach in the 1840s involved creating a machine that would take in air, compress it so it would become hot, and then expand it through a set of pipes.

Revision

Physician John Gorrie’s approach in the 1840s involved creating a machine that would take in air, compress the air through a set of pipes, thus turning it warm, and then expanding that same air, cause it to turn cold.

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